I am a Year 6 student at Edmund Hillary School in Auckland, NZ. I am in Room 9 and my teacher is Roya. This is a place where I will share my learning. Please note that some of it will not be complete, it will be my first draft. Remember to be positive, thoughtful and helpful when you leave me a comment.
Ka rawe, great work on your descriptive writing Patrick! I love how you have written from the point of view of a dolphin. Next time you should have a go at adding some figurative language (such as onomatopoeia, simile or personification).
Please structure your comments as follows: Positive - Something done well Thoughtful - A sentence to let us know you actually read/watched or listened to what they had to say Helpful - Give some ideas for next time or ask a question you want to know more about
Ka rawe, great work on your descriptive writing Patrick! I love how you have written from the point of view of a dolphin. Next time you should have a go at adding some figurative language (such as onomatopoeia, simile or personification).
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