I am a Year 6 student at Edmund Hillary School in Auckland, NZ. I am in Room 9 and my teacher is Roya. This is a place where I will share my learning. Please note that some of it will not be complete, it will be my first draft. Remember to be positive, thoughtful and helpful when you leave me a comment.
HI patrick its fua ur classmate I really really like your desription writing I like how your tittle is creative so cool its so cold it sound so intresting its so creative nice work keep it up.
Hi patrick it is me Murray I really like how you put effort in your writing I enjoyed reading your story I hope you could write more keep going at it and have a great day.
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HI patrick its fua ur classmate I really really like your desription writing I like how your tittle is creative so cool its so cold it sound so intresting its so creative nice work keep it up.
ReplyDeleteHi patrick it is me Murray I really like how you put effort in your writing I enjoyed reading your story I hope you could write more keep going at it and have a great day.
ReplyDeleteKai ora Patrick I like how you brainstormed. You could improve where you placed the picture and you could of changed the colour of the text.
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