I am a Year 6 student at Edmund Hillary School in Auckland, NZ. I am in Room 9 and my teacher is Roya. This is a place where I will share my learning. Please note that some of it will not be complete, it will be my first draft. Remember to be positive, thoughtful and helpful when you leave me a comment.
Tuesday 18 August 2020
If you could drive a car, where would you drive and why?
Hi Patrick, That sounds lovely. I really like your reasons. I like fun people as well. Hey check that you have used a capital I for the word I. Proofread your writing. Well done Patrick.
Hello Patrick. It was so good to hear about your fun times with your family in Opotiki. Opotiki is not far from where I was born in Whakatane. I hope you get to go there again soon and play with your cousins, or maybe they will visit you again. You wrote so much and I can tell you have goo memories. It would be good to see full stops and capital letters. Full stops help us to have little pauses in our stories. It allows us to take a breath when we read and then after a full stop we always use a capital letter. Look forward to seeing you again Patrick. Keep smiling :) Bronca
Hi Patrick, My name is Sione from Rm 2 EHS, I really like the picture that you have and your reason is so amazing, I like the colour red on the words and the lovely background.Ka kite. Have a good weekend!
Please structure your comments as follows: Positive - Something done well Thoughtful - A sentence to let us know you actually read/watched or listened to what they had to say Helpful - Give some ideas for next time or ask a question you want to know more about
Hi Patrick,
ReplyDeleteThat sounds lovely. I really like your reasons. I like fun people as well. Hey check that you have used a capital I for the word I. Proofread your writing. Well done Patrick.
Hello Patrick. It was so good to hear about your fun times with your family in Opotiki. Opotiki is not far from where I was born in Whakatane. I hope you get to go there again soon and play with your cousins, or maybe they will visit you again. You wrote so much and I can tell you have goo memories. It would be good to see full stops and capital letters. Full stops help us to have little pauses in our stories. It allows us to take a breath when we read and then after a full stop we always use a capital letter. Look forward to seeing you again Patrick. Keep smiling :)
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Hi Patrick, My name is Sione from Rm 2 EHS, I really like the picture that you have and your reason is so amazing, I like the colour red on the words and the lovely background.Ka kite. Have a good weekend!
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