I am a Year 6 student at Edmund Hillary School in Auckland, NZ. I am in Room 9 and my teacher is Roya. This is a place where I will share my learning. Please note that some of it will not be complete, it will be my first draft. Remember to be positive, thoughtful and helpful when you leave me a comment.
Hi Patrick, Fantastic proofreading this time. Continue to share it with me first and then we can work on it together. Your letter to your pen pal is nice and cute. I am sure you will enjoy hearing back from your pen pal.
Kia Orana Patrick. Its Ema from Room Eleven, I just would like to say that this is fantastic. But maybe have a little creativity but overall the card was very describing. I see your class also done it, which was entertaining and good on all of you guys. Maybe you should tell why you did this and what its about next time. I also like how you did paragraphs but theres some capital letters needed and some punctuation marks but this work is immaculate because of how you described what you like and do. Keep up the good work Patrick.
Hi Patrick It's your best friend Lie, I like how you described yourself and showing leadership by tell yourself who you are. The other people did really good I can'st stop looking at it. You could make us proud if you make some more and don't give up because you are really good at this and this would also make your parents proud if you get suprise. Have a good weekend
Please structure your comments as follows: Positive - Something done well Thoughtful - A sentence to let us know you actually read/watched or listened to what they had to say Helpful - Give some ideas for next time or ask a question you want to know more about
Hi Patrick,
ReplyDeleteFantastic proofreading this time. Continue to share it with me first and then we can work on it together. Your letter to your pen pal is nice and cute. I am sure you will enjoy hearing back from your pen pal.
Kia Orana Patrick.
ReplyDeleteIts Ema from Room Eleven, I just would like to say that this is fantastic. But maybe have a little creativity but overall the card was very describing. I see your class also done it, which was entertaining and good on all of you guys. Maybe you should tell why you did this and what its about next time. I also like how you did paragraphs but theres some capital letters needed and some punctuation marks but this work is immaculate because of how you described what you like and do.
Keep up the good work Patrick.
Hi Patrick It's your best friend Lie, I like how you described yourself and showing leadership by tell yourself who you are. The other people did really good I can'st stop looking at it. You could make us proud if you make some more and don't give up because you are really good at this and this would also make your parents proud if you get suprise. Have a good weekend
ReplyDeleteHi Patrick Its Aryan and I really like your Pen Pal letter and I like Avengers too and that was my favorite part too
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